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For legal purposes I cannot have this free here while it's for sale on Kindle. Part of the licensing agreement. But if interested, you can check it out and download it instantly on your Kindle, windows pc, cell phone, or ipad or ipod for only 99 cents. Just click the link in the description below.
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A story for my upcoming collection, titled after this story, "The Edge". Feel free to critique the hell out of it. It probably needs it. I hate the formatting limitations that DA leaves us with, but I think I did the best I could with the limited text and html coding they provide us with.
I'd love your feedback. How could I have done better? What did you think of Tomas? What did you think of the first person narrative/journal switch off. I've always had issues with that.
Was it tense at all? Find any errors? Let me know. I don't bite. My fiancé won't let me. She took away my custom made fangs. She says I can only use them on her... Women.


Story copyright © 2011 Joseph Sweet MCN: C5MLQ-PELMY-GB7JD [link] myfreecopyright.com

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SanguineAthena Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2011  Professional Writer
I felt weird about favouriting this before the contest was up, but I think I can now without insulting anyone's sensibilities. ;)
I have a lot of feelings for this story. Especially near the end when poor Thomas is writing his last story on a waitress's notepad even though he knows there's no point before kissing it and throwing it into the abyss. In a way I found it painful to read, but in another I felt very warm because I know that that's is exactly what I would have done and is something that I think about all the time. You've really gotten to the heart of one of my greatest fears, but instead of just observing it, you made it the core of a really great story. So I thank you for that. I look at a lot of artwork and rarely collect it, but if I could I'd collect this one twice.

(Bullshit to English ->) Whoa, you understand me! :O
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2011  Professional General Artist
Thank you. I haven't gotten any feedback on this story yet, so it felt good to read your response. I'm glad you liked it. :) I think this was inspired largely by the first tests of that hadron collider and a dream I had shortly afterward.
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SanguineAthena Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Professional Writer
Yeah I was pretty freaked out about that thing too. But kind of curious at the same time.

(And actually when I was thinking up that last comment I kind of cried. If you wanted to know, hahaha)
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011  Professional General Artist
Well, I don't want to freak you out anymore, because I like talking about that kind of stuff. I guess the story did its job. I guess I wondered if gravitational distortion from a new black hole would slow down time and if we would even know it had happened for a while. It's all scientific theory, really. There's no actual evidence of what would happen, except what they can see in other galaxies that have active black holes. We have a dormant one at the center of our galaxy, which they've proven now that all galaxies have and may actually be what brought all of the stars and planets together. You could probably content yourself with the fact that there are so many billions of things that could go wrong at any second which could take us out. Worrying about one or two seems like a waste of time and energy in the grand scheme of things. With so many things - our star going cold and freezing us out, or going supernova and destroying the whole solar system and beyond, the super back hole becoming active suddenly, meteors, alien invasion (lol), world war three, The super volcano that takes up a portion of three states centered in yellow stone national park erupting and destroying most of the U.S. and spewing magma across most of the globe and possibly blackening the sky, causing nuclear winter. All of that and all of the countless other things we could worry about would drive a person crazy. Better to fantasize about those occurrences in stories and enjoy our lives in reality. I think that's one of the things that horror helps with. It allows us to face our fears on the printed page or on a computer screen where they're safe and can't hurt us for real. And then, when the story is over, we can go on with our daily lives, maybe a little stronger. :) Such is the hope anyway.
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